What do you think of my story...thanks.?

Once upon a time in a small tightly packed village, there lived a fairly young brown haired lemur. He had been cut out of his pack as his looks were too abnormal for his tribe to handle. This Lemur was called Harry and had a long thick beetle like nose with furry eyes with a black like fur bib over his tummy. So far you may be thinking "he seems like a pretty normal lemur to me" however it wasn't this that made his stand out. It was his personality. Looks can mean a simple term as appearance but also can mean his "looks" to other leamers; eg not taking to him. Harry lived in his lemur made cabin with dark wooden chairs and his best possession were his musical instruments. He would sit there for hours everyday playing his piano or belting out lemur 80's hits while eating cucumber at the same time. As much as he praised and treasured there instruments, he knew there was something miss in his long pointless life. Crystal clear tears ran down his smooth fur, making a sweet squeaky sound of upset. Insects, Hedgehogs and even wild cats were aware of this sound but not any lemers which he deep down knew he missed. There was one he particularly missed; her name was Hoops, spaghetti hoops, She had affectionate curls dangling from her head with naturally shinny deep blue eyes, but it wasnt her "looks" which made Harry weep deeper onto his rug, it was her kindness, friendliness her and he acceptance and even extra emotion for Harry. They had met at their local animal information group. Harry walked in not thinking of anything but his next musical project to work on. He walked past groups of teen lemurs demonstrating steetdancing and applying lipstick at top speed. He glared at them and felt a little jealous as he had always fancied putting lipstick on...Maybe if I have dazzling lips they will be my "frr frriied friend" he said. 'Hey" shouted the team lemar member of the group. "We are starting any minute now! Grab you furry bumed feline friends and hop aboard in the hall!" This was Miss Apple. She was very over excited about everything and a bit annoying. Suddenly breaking the silence was a loud crows with smelly perfumes on-the teen group came in. Follwed by the eldeey lemeras greeting all th eyoungoes. Harry snorted trying to be cool. Nearly every seat was filled now, only two remained. Harry looked around about to burst into tears but then jumped and fell on the ground as he has just lad eyes on Hoops! He was nervous but attracted and decided to take the risk...He went over and said Hi, Hoops went "Helle..I am new here...You look now too...Harry liked what he said...The other lemars sneered in a cool way. Hoops didnt say anything else..just stated into Harry'y eyes..Harry done the same to Hoops and not long after he invited her to his lonly life house. They spoke about roadworks and how they didnt like Miss Apple. Harry performed his newly made love song for her and she hugged him in a warm and gentle way. One day he suggested they went into the forest to get some fruit. Hoops said yes.."sounds fun". Harry jumped up and said "Yippie!" then looked at her lemer tail and smiled. " See you tomorrow" Harry saidto Hoops. Hoops looked at her curls with her small mirror and said "oh er bye". The next day they went into the forest, with Harry playing his trumped and Hoops talking about her fave clothes, shops and nuggets. Harry loved it. They found a spot to have lunch after picking some fruit. Harry had done enough waiting..he wanted to make some lemar babies who would love to listen to his music...and fast! Um "Hoops" he said...cough..You have curls and our one would be you know...curly? Hoops stared.."wait..are you asking me to curl your hair" harry said no! I mean...you know make babies..Hoops said..what! Oh well...Um Harry um...you know what I think I have to go..my um...sister wants me round..bye". she hoped off into the trees and Harry's heart fell apart..he rushed over and tried to find Hoops..he caught a lasp glimpse of her applying her lemar shine blusher on...Hoops! he called, in a stong hopefully voice but she just hoped faster. This was 3 years ago now and Harry had never attempted to try love or any kind to relationship again..his tears had dried now..He was bored..he was very bored..Could he move house? Could he go out..He got his kettle and made a cup of tea. and put some lemar poison in it.. He sighed in a grumpy him like way.Harry had been alone for so long, he forgot that looks didnt mean a great lemur. He knew never to trust anyone who "looked" nice again.